[FFML] [SHnY] The Score of Haruhi Suzumiya

[Henry Cobb]

On Mon, Sep 5, 2011 at 8:51 AM, Brian Randall <durandall at gmail.com> wrote:
> Haruhi: The Suzumiya-Suzumiya empire is SUPERIOR!

Yeah, mass edit when I noticed Kyon using first name when he should
not be on that basis.

> Out of curiosity, why do you always make Kyon so much of a buttmonkey?
>  Or do you just not care for the Kyon/Haruhi relationship, and that's
> why you make her so unlikable?
>
> I'll admit, it makes it very hard for me to get into your stories....
> Granted, you are consistent; I'm just curious about the reasons for
> your characterizations.

How would you like to see her? This version is NEVER depressed, as
she's sitting on her on switch. Why shouldn't she be excited? She
wants to be special and is clearly aware that she is special.

Would you rather see a story where Haruhi has a small window into her
true nature and fears it? She'd be constantly blaming and suppressing
herself and Kyon's role would be to first take an interest in her
himself and then slowly work her out of her shell. That would be a
complete inversion of the standard oblivious jerkass Haruhi.

>> Tsuruya took two steps backwards to the open door then bowed. "My
>> compliments to your teacher, Miss Suzumiya. Please take good care of
>> Mikuru-chan."
>
> I'm only pointing it out here, though it applies throughout;
>
> You've got 'Miss' and '-chan' in the same sentence.  Technically, it's
> not too bad a case of mix-and-match, since they aren't remotely
> equivalent honorifics, but it does stick out to me.

How to translate Tsuruya? I'd use southern gentry, but there's no
Kansai dialect in the sources.

> Indifference to non-indifference, in four paragraphs.  I don't see
> what prompted his change of heart here.  Should Mikuru have a more
> pitiable reaction?

Yes.

> Haruhi: Can't miss a chance to remind Kyon he's a loser!
> Kyon: I did notice who was writing this fic, yes.  Do you think you
> could add some hints of dere-dere to your tsun-tsun?
> Haruhi: That's so boring -- I'm trying for something new: yan-tsun!
> Kyon: ...kill me now.
> Ryouko: How disappointing!  That's exactly what all of her other
> boyfriends said!

Pity the old list tradition of MST has died out. Perhaps we need a MST
tolerant tag?

> It occurs to me that this Haruhi had to have had a different (vastly)
> introduction at the beginning of the year.  That might warrant
> exploration, since it seems to have changed Kyon a bit, too.

She hasn't had a chance yet to show Kyon her favorite thing, but it
has been hinted at a bit. She's a giant movie buff. I thought I might
have her reveal the reason for the haircut this time, but that's
upcoming.

> I hope this was helpful.

Yes it is. Thanks.

-HJC