[FFML] [Kim Possible / Phineas and Ferb] Crossover, Crossover, Sing Me a Song

[T M]

I'm not familiar with Phineas and Ferb at all, so I can't comment on their
characterizations. Once I read it all the way through, I think I understand
why you felt they needed to crossover. There are a lot of similarities.

> "Oh god, I hate that little shit," Dr. Doofenschmirtz said, clenching
>his hands into fists.  "Always whining in his songs about how the
>world is dark and uncaring!  Dark and uncaring?  I'll show him..."

Having not seen Doofenschmirtz my mental image of him is basically another
Dr. Drakken.

> "Look, if you're going to go to a concert with someone you like, I
>have to give you some advice," Dr. Doofenschmirtz said to Vanessa as
>they sat on the patio in lounge chairs, drinking coke.  "If you see
>any girl who has really big hands, you will have to eliminate her
>before she steals your boyfriend."
>
> "..."

That's...some unusual advice.

>"Secondly, if he goes for a kiss, don't pass up the chance because
>you'll miss your favorite chorus and you want to sing along with it.
>The chance MAY NEVER COME AGAIN," he said very urgently.

But not as unusual as this. At least it's not the stereotypical
overprotective father advice.

Actually, it's just occured to me, is he saying "don't choose to sing your
favorite
chorus in preference to kissing your date?" I parsed it as "don't pass up
the chance
to kiss because passing it up will cause you to miss your favorite chorus."
Which
was bizarre, but this guy seems pretty goofy.



> "Don't touch it!  It's evil," her father said, knocking it back into the
box.
Heh.


> "NO," Candace said.  "Everyone would think I'm a geek!"  She threw
>the lab coat back in the pile.  "And now I have a headache."  Her head
>throbbed.
>
> "I'll get you an aspirin, dear, then we'll open the rest of these crates."

My initial thought is that Candace is Kim with amnesia or is somehow a
fragment of
Kim's personality given a separate existance.

> "Are you saying you never did that at her age?" Dr. Doofenschmirtz said.
>
> Charlene laughed nervously.
>
> "Look, when I was her age, no one would have gone to the concert with
>me, my car would have broken down and gone off a cliff and I would
>have then been mauled by a yeti.  Let her seize all the happiness she
>can, while she still can," Dr. Doofenschmirtz said.

For someone who seems to be a mad scientist, he seems very well adjusted to
fatherhood.
And to have an unusually civil relationship with his ex.

>Lightning now began arcing out of the busted inator and Dr.
>Doofenschmirtz began dodging like crazy.

Is "inator" meant to represent a member of a generic category of mad science
equipment
or should there be a prefix like "destroy" in front of it?

> "OOH," she said, headache vanishing.
...
> Her headache vanished and she lost herself in fantasy land.
Her headache vanishes twice.


> Harold ran around with a bunch of guys he
>met in college.  Drew Theodore P. Lipsky, Heinz Doofenschmirtz, James
>Timothy Possible,

So, Candace probably isn't Kim, if the Possible family exists and her
parents talk about them.

>She didn't need a good excuse.  She was EVIL, dammit.
>What use is being evil if you can't hit someone just for being alive?
 Heh. Shego is fun.

> "This is AWESOME," Fred said.
>
> "WOO!" Lacey shouted.  "I wish my Dad was evil!"
Heh.

>Also, Drakken is loose in Danville and on a quest to
>bring back the 80s.
Leaping to conclusions seems to be a popular, albeit unproductive, pastime
in Danville.

> She opened the window and flipped out of it up onto the roof.
Candace clearly has _something_ going on, though I couldn't tell you what.

> "Score!" Jeremy said.  His phone rang and he checked it.  "Oh man,
>Mom is threatening to ground me forever if I don't get home.  Though
>for some reason, she's using Suzie's account."
>
> Candace twitched.

Either it really is Suzie, or that's an in-joke from her series I don't get.

> Dr. Drakken studied the block of ice.  "This freeze ray idea of yours
>wasn't half-bad once I took off the melting function and fixed a dozen
>or so mistakes, Doofenschmirtz.  Thanks for adding to my arsenal."
Drakken rarely gets to out-evil or out-science people. Technically, he must
be a genius
to create the kinds of devices he does, but he's such a flake it's hard to
notice.

>This made enough sense to worry Shego she was missing something.

I think you combined "made enough sense to worry Shego" and "made Shego
worry she was missing something."

>The answer, you see, was the Fly-By-Thought-Inator, which Dr.
>Drakken had fixed its tendency to fry your brain the more you flew.

If you want to use "which" you need to restructure the last half of the
sentenece. Otherwise, delete 'which' and use a semicolon.

>"You got hit with an amnesia ray.  It made you forget all our
>adventures.  You draw pictures of you busting things and don't even
>remember why," he said sadly.

So now we have our answers.

>Perry made odd gestures with his head as if he expected her to do
>something with her hair,
Another P&F in-joke?

>"Oh come on, a loser like Doofenschmirtz with a wife and child?
>Never happen," Shego said. "I doubt he's ever gotten to first base."
>
> "Hey, I've gotten to first base!" Drakken said.
>
> "Second."
>
> Drakken grumbled.

Why is Drakken reacting to Doofenschmirtz being taunted? Also, if Shego is
correcting him by saying he's gotten to second base, rather than first, why
is he upset? Shouldn't that be better?

> Everyone suddenly turned and looked at them and Shego said, "New
>Topic," very quickly.

Heh.
> "I'm not that kind of stupid," Drakken said, then pointed at Shego.
>"Don't even say it."
Drakken is in good form. He wouldn't always have caught that one.

> "But she even fought a fifty foot version of Buford to save us."
'But?'


> Queen of Mars or Victory of the Monster Truck Rally
'Victor', unless she really did take the role of Nike.

>Sherlock Holmes or Champion

"or become Champion"

> IF that crazy woman had hurt them
Did you mean to capitalize the 'F' in 'if'?

>then began sticking corn dogs in everyone's mouth.
mouth->mouths

>A brown haired woman with short curly brown hair,

You mention the brownness of the hair twice. Also, 4th Doctor, woo!

>Drakken was now trapped against one wall and Ron was pummeling him to
>his embarrassment.

Comma after him.

>with bits of Dr. Drakkens'
Apostrophe before the 's'.

> "How well do you cling to the outside of flying dinosaurs?"
>
> "Pretty well," Kim said.
Heh. That really isn't that odd a question in her world.

> "I assume the waterslide is for emergency escape?" Ferb asked.
>
> "Of course," Dr. Smith said, just a little nervously.

Didn't she just warn them about falling to their deaths?

>"Though..."  He gave Dr. Smith a look which normally would have made
>her happy but now made her realize she might be about to be in a love
>triangle with HERSELF.

You know, that could actually be a lot of fun, as a story, if there was
mutual progress on both sides
of the triangle, rather than mutual stasis. Both identities would shortly
need to claim they'd talked
 to each other and had agreed to a time-share or something, or it would
grind to a halt, unless they
were all even more disfunctional.

> A few gears blew.
>
> "Dad?"
>
> "I can't tell you the rest of this story," he said.

Bwahahaha!

I wonder if Vanessa will ever give evil a real try.
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