[FFML] [Fusion][Sailor Moon] MMSS 3 - The First Mission

Adrian Tymes wingcat at pacbell.net
Tue Jun 2 09:59:22 PDT 2009

--- On Tue, 6/2/09, Michael Gilson <mgilson at mchsi.com> wrote:

> Very entertaining, but here you have
> Ami leaving with Makoto and  
> still being on the scene with Artemis.

You missed this:

> On Jun 2, 2009, at 4:15 AM, StudioPC wrote:
> > He nodded and cast the teleport spell, the mall
> vanishing to be
> > replaced by the control room.

So, in the same paragraph, Artemis went from being at the mall
that Ami had just left, to being at the control room that Ami
had just gone to.  It is a bit confusing - perhaps if Artemis
were to transition at the end of a paragraph?

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