[FFML] [Fanfic][Ranma/SM] On A Clear Day You Can See Forever Chapter 21

[Mark MacKinnon]

Glazius Falconar wrote:
> Mark MacKinnon wrote:
>   
>>    It's been two years since I posted a chapter of this story, and I'm 
>> sure there are people who didn't think they'd ever see it continued.  
>> Well, slow I may be, but here, at long last, is the next chapter.  Two 
>> years.
>>     
>
> Two years?
>
> Man, why is it still fresh in my mind?
>
> Congratulations on getting that done at least.
>   
    Thanks.  Some days it was all uphill, I'm here to tell you.

> Soooooo comments:
>
> Saturn + Alienists = this is just the plot of S through a glass darkly, 
> isn't it? Or has that analogue happened already and this is something 
> different?
>   
    Well, there are parallels, aren't there?  The enemy within and all 
that?  But no, this is not directly analogous to the S storyline.

> "She's on the money!" "I'm broke!" was probably the best exchange out of 
> all of them, but that whole scenario was good for some much-needed comedy.
>   
    Yea, it's always good to ease the tension ... before blowing 
everything up.

> I'm not entirely sure about the whole hostage situation in the 
> antechamber there. This is a plan that dynamited the city center and 
> overran it with monsters AS A DISTRACTION; presumably the consequences 
> will be more dire than just one more person dying. Though I can buy 
> Ranma not knowing if that death is going to be the spark that touches 
> everything off, and that, combined with him being a) tired b) wet c) 
> hungry d) without backup e) weirdly aroused f) did I mention tired? 
> would probably be enough to stall.
>   
    Actually, this plan did not dynamite the city center.  Hild did that 
to isolate the area and draw Ranma in.  In fact, the Sisterhood has not 
used lethal force very often, preferring more subtle approaches.  And so 
Ranma is faced with this situation, and yes, the math is obvious.  One 
life for many.  But Ranma is still not that cold-blooded.  Through it 
all what he resents about the vamp's plans is that she brings death and 
misery to the lives of so many innocent people.  Ranma wants to protect 
those people from the monsters, and the vamp, and all the forces that 
prey on them.  And he's Ranma.  He thinks he can beat this, free the 
hostage, take out the Maidens, break through the door.  If given enough 
time.  And he probably could.  But he didn't have it.  Had he acted 
right away, he might have been in time to stop the circle from closing 
but, as soon as the two Maidens came through the door, although he 
didn't realise it, it was already too late.

> But I'd leave it. Calling it out would just draw attention to it more, 
> and it does make the whole OH SHIT moment later more impactful. Kind of 
> a "Hey guys we'll be fine as long as we rescue the priesWHAT ARE THEY 
> DOING THE FABRIC OF SPACE AND TIME SHOULD NOT BEND LIKE THAT"
>
> Also, good loss. Things Went Wrong, but there's enough floating plot 
> threads left to believe our protagonists still have a fighting chance.
>   
    Yes, all hope is not lost.  Yet.

> One last thing, and this is just purely laziness on my part, I have no 
> idea what's up with the couple of twists at the end. The Dark has 
> returned? It's got capital letters on it, therefore bad juju. Black 
> crystals in an impact crater? Bad juju. But, mostly because of two 
> years, I don't remember why. Any chance you could just tell me? Not in 
> the story, in a private message, because presumably I'd have a clue if 
> not for two years.
>   
    There are a couple of posts that speculate on that, they might help you.

Thanks for the comments!

Mark

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