[FFML] [Ranma/MKR] Fire in the Water, act one (draft complete)

[Shadow Wolf]

On Feb 7, 2008 5:22 PM, The Eternal Lost Lurker
<lurkerdrome at sbcglobal.net> wrote:
> Ordinarily, I would not dignify anything Kaydee posts with even a glance.
>
> We are, in short, completely different from you, who somehow have managed to
> remain frozen in time for the past decade, never changing except for minor
> modifications to your Internet handle.
>

I don't know, I think there's been at least some minimal improvement.

One of the major problems with Kaydee's fics in the past is that they
read like very short outlines or summaries of a longer story - they
are all tell and no show. On a scale of 1 to 10, few rise above a 1.

The one posted this week (Ranma/Xander), on the other hand, was
actually somewhat acceptable for a story of its length. It didn't
attempt to over-explain the backstory, the twist (while not all that
original) was competently executed, and I haven't seen quite that
variation before, and the characterization was actually halfway decent
(assuming you can accept "female ranma marries guy"). If you're going
to write flash-fiction (not my favorite - I prefer long works), that's
the way to do it - don't waste time with backstory, concentrate on
characterization, and have a decent twist. Overall, I give it a 4.

Now to see if she can actually repeat the feat...

The Lurker's fic - that's a 9, and I'm definitely interested in the
next chapter.

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Shadow Wolf
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