[FFML] [Fanfic][Naruto] Suiren, Chapter 14: Blood...
eimii.sensei at gmail.com
Mon Sep 3 23:02:07 PDT 2007
> >The scene was always told as a story Sakura's grandfather told to her,
> >and it's relayed just as Sakura heard it. The prose displayed is _not_
> >what Hinata hears. That's intentional ^_^;...
> It might help to set it off from the rest of the text in some way.
> Perhaps just a brief mention of her thinking back to her grandfather
> telling her the story....
Hmm... i'll consider it, though a lot of the confusion i cause with my
lack of transition sentences _is_ intentional ^_^;;...
> >Sakura doesn't press because it really is a senstive issule, from her
> >point of view, so she'd prefer if Hinata said only what she is
> >comfortable with, and Hinata's behavior really depends on how Hinata
> >sees her position in the clan changing...
> Given what we know of canon Hinata, she's probably /relieved/ to have
> the pressure taken off her. As soon as she gets over that, though,
> she may be upset at the insult, that she can't hack it as clain heir,
> even with all the work she's done - on the other hand, she may
> actually have /accepted/ it willingly as part of a deal to put Neji
> in as the heir... I could see her doing that... hmmmm.
Neji can never be the heir- and now, neither can Hinata. The next
person in line would be Hanabi. As to the reasons behind this
change... that would be a spoiler ^_^;...
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