[FFML] [Ranma/various] Avenging: Act 3 Chapter 7

[DB Sommer]

Nugar wrote:

>$Took my time C&Cing this, but, well, sorry, DB.  I think I've lost my
>touch.  I haven't exactly felt funny this past year, you know, and I'm
>sort of out of practice, and I never did find it easy to comment on
>this series, since I don't know Marvel and for whatever reason just
>don't see many opportunities to be snarky.  But really, I have no
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% Anything is always appreciated.

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>>The Hulk was torn. On one side, he wanted to near Thor. On the other, he
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% Used all the grammar comments.

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>>Bullseye was one out of a million. Maybe ten million.
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% Nah. There are enough superheroes and villains in the world that 
that's probably accurate. :)

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>>The bullet struck the figure's head cleanly, making it explode in a
>>shower of streamers and party favors.
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>$Candy would have been more appropo, though sillier.
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% I think party favors works. The Hulk would just eat the candy anyway.

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>>A net woven of steel cable came at Bullseye, and she barely dodged it.
>>Daredevil came emerging from the cloud in nearly the opposite direction.
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>>Bullseye threw down the flash bomb. The special wraparound sunglasses
>>her employer had given her tinted instantly, preventing her from being
>>blinded. Now Daredevil was dead. It was too bad, as he had excited her
>>more than anyone since the Underworld hit. Killing competent,
>>professional, and old school hit men was always a turn on. But to all
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% Actually all of those were meant to refer to Underworld. he was an old 
time hit man that when he was eventually released, discovered the world 
full of SPBs, which made him have to adapt his modus operandi.

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>>Hulk will never smoke again," he swore.
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>$Bah, smoking is good for you.  Unless if, you know, you're on fire or
>something.  Just look at Revy.  Chain smokes all day and still can't
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% Heh. Had Revy come along earlier, she might have been Bullseye. She's 
already halfway there as is.

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>>third, leaving his fist bloody. And then a fourth. And then Bullseye's
>>body convulsed so violently even Daredevil was almost thrown off.
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>>"Yessss!" Bullseye gurgled more than groaned in pleasure. The totally
>>inappropriate reaction cut through the haze, making even the darkest
>>portions of his mind cease in stunned realization of what had just
>>happened to the girl beneath him.
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>$"Oh, I give all the girls multiple orgasms," he assured her.  "Want
>another?"  And he punched her in the nose again.
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% hehehehe. Evil but fun

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>>While a portion of his mind insisted she should die, a victim of her own
>>violence, it felt too much like he was failing her in some way. He swore
>>never to fail anyone, not after Shampoo. He didn't know why he would
>>connect the two, since they had nothing in common, but it was there.
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>$Vaginas, carrying out contracts to kill people, no, nothing in common at ALL.
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% said in the wrong company that will certainly get your ass kicked.

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>>"No," Daredevil said weakly. "'Just in time' would be before I was shot,
>>stabbed, and mutilated. This is 'almost too late'."
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% Well, he does have a point.

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>>As the ambulance doors closed, Captain Japan said, "Well,
>>congratulations on having someone in your rogue's gallery that isn't a
>>complete putz. The bad news is, she's a complete psychopath and is in
>>love with you."
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>$Heh.  Poor guy finally got his wish, and it sucks.
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% Yep. Can't win for want of losing. On the other hand, this provides 
for plenty of future potential work.

>$Enjoyable as always, sorry I got nothing for comments.  :(
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% There were plenty enough. Thanks for the help. It's mucho appreciated.

DB Sommer

>-Nugar
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