[FFML] Rabbits

[DB Sommer]

Almost didn't recognize the handle. Thank goodness i glanced through 
other's C+C.


Matthew Miller wrote:

>The Devilbunnies newsgroup is, so far as I know, no longer alive. If
>you've never heard of it, I'll summarize. Evil sentient rabbits.
>  
>

% Got it.

>You're good.
>
>Miashara
>
>dear, what do you do when you need to go farther? Farther than Pluto?
>You need something bigger, stronger, and more powerful. Black holes,
>those have it all. They're too big, though, far away, and busy
>gobbling up stars. But, but, but, there are smaller ones. Primordial
>black holes. We could harness them.
>  
>

% This sounds about as smart as those girls from Kidou Shinsengumi who 
decided to summon the goddess directly to make their wish, rather than 
going to the shrine and doing it like everyone else.

>
>
>"Most definitely. That was but one form of insanity. It can take many
>others.
>

% True


>
>"But you two saw that too.
>

% that, too. (Yay. Helpful C+C)


>
>They all pulled themselves from the car and stretched. Wilson was sure
>he would never be able to feel his toes again, and his right hand was
>numb. Reeve was already moving about oddly, stretching every muscle in
>order but looking like a seizure in slow motion while he did so.
>

% Nice descriptor there


>Reeve stretched again and trotted up to the front door. It was a huge
>oak thing on a thick oak frame. No knocker, one large lock, and a old
>fashioned handle. The key fit smoothly, and it opened silently.
>  
>

% I wonder if we'll get that 'Evil Dead' vibe from this place.

>Wilson and Barnes came up behind them, 
>

% behind him (I think)

>Wilson went in, dropped his half filled 
>

% half-filled

>duffel bag on the bed and
>looked around. The closet was empty except for a stack of fresh linen.
>The bed was made. Both of the windows had their shutters drawn,
>

% seems wordy. Perhaps 'Both windows' shutters were drawn,'

> and he
>opened these before unpacking. His view looked down over the cars and
>driveway, and the breeze wandered in. There was a dresser, a night
>stand, a fireplace, and that was it. When his clothes were moved to
>the dresser he went back out.
>
>Reeve he could hear talking to Barnes in the master,
>

% That's... off. Not sure what you meant.


>They fled as fast they could. Wilson had been right, and the feeble
>lights of the town didn't seem catch them at all. The meadow was
>mostly level, but they were afraid run
>

% afraid to run


>bearing grease was protruding from his waist. While Reeve was holding
>his arms back, Wilson tried to get a hold of it's
>

its

% And I did not expect that either.


>"No, saying pull when someone throws a target."
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>

% Heh

>
>"Let's go inside," Reeve suggested.
>
>"Yeah," Barnes agreed.
>
>"I'm game."
>
>And they did.
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>

% That was appropriately whacked.

% I may never look at bunnies the same way again.

% Nice work

DB Sommer

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