[FFML] [C&C] [Detective Conan] Lessons Learned Along the Way

[David H. Menéndez Arán]

Hey there.

I'd like to do a proper C&C of this one, go line by line, but truth be told 
I simply don't have the time right now. There's not much wrong with the fic, 
anyway, grammar-wise, and I only spotted four or five typos. All in all, it 
was pretty polished, which helps enormously.

Still, I simply had to drop you a line congratulating you for your story. 
It's so rare to see a fanfic based on Detective Conan worth reading - I 
think I've only found two or three. The reason I send this to the list at 
large is to try to make people check in their backlogs and give this fic a 
chance - if you have read Conan, you won't regret it.

Character sketches can be fun - I love them, myself - but focusing on as 
complex a character as Vermouth can make it both interesting and 
challenging. You pulled it off just fine, building on her backstory in a 
believable fashion. You must really love the source material to be able to 
add so many details from the manga spread through 64 volumes and counting.

As you said in the notes, there was sex and dark themes aplenty, but the 
detached third-person, present tense inner monologue you picked was actually 
perfect to keep it from sounding crass. You might have abused of the 
paragraphs starting with "She...", but all in all I liked it. I think there 
was more to be explored in the Gin and Vermouth relationship, too, but on 
the other hand the fic's length seemed just about right to me. Decisions, 
decisions...

So, to recap. Read this, FFMLers. It's good, it's tasty.

Thanks for sharing. Talk to you later, Aishuu,

Latin_D


----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Aishuu Shadowweaver" <mbsilvana at yahoo.com>
To: <ffml at chez-vrolet.net>
Sent: Tuesday, July 17, 2007 1:33 PM
Subject: [FFML] [Detective Conan][oneshot] Lessons Learned Along the Way


Lessons Learned Along the Way
~ A Detective Conan Fan Fiction ~
by aishuu
Notes: Likely should be considered R for under age
sex, dark themes.
Wordcount: 5,700
Summary: Vermouth may have been called a "rotten
apple" but she's really more of an onion. Strip away
one layer, and you'll encounter another, and another.
Even she doesn't know where the real her begins.