[FFML] [C&C] Goddess Fayu
groves_ca at yahoo.co.uk
Thu Jul 19 04:54:17 PDT 2007
The Eternal Lost Lurker wrote:
> Jan Ken Pow: The variant in which the first one to punch the others in the
> face wins.
Did I spell it wrong?
> It helps that Kasumi has the same divine blood, no? Because otherwise,
> mortals can't even see those...
That was sort of what I was getting at. I just don't care to spoon-feed
>> Urd paused. "We're not sure where exactly we're gonna have Nabiki
>> working, but I know she's got the qualifications for most of the jobs
>> we've considered. Probably, she'll be in our Accounts Payable
>> department, but you never know."
> I shudder to think what "Accounts Payable" entails for Yggdrasil...
Handing out wishes, of course!
>> Belldandy considered. "No, I think we've done enough teleporting
And everyone thinks that Bell is perfectly nice.
>> "Oh, that is easy to explain." Belldandy smiled. "You see, we're
> *FACEFAULT* Oooookay, so this is TV series Belldandy all of a sudden. X_X
Possibly. Though she's just as bad in the OVA. However, the fact that
these are her sisters will likely make her even less likely to try to
cover up the truth.
>> Akane shook off the surprise, and grinned. "An android, huh? Skuld's
>> cooler than I thought."
> Considering how far out of her realm of experience a robot is, Akane's
> taking this awfully calmly.
Combat trance. All that would filter into her brain is that she has to
change tactics. Though you're right, some kind of reaction would be
>> Akane regarded her warily. Rather than leading with her left hand,
>> Sigel was now leading with her right. *Did I damage her internals?
>> No--she's out of power on the right fist!*
> That's a little too technical for Akane's internal thoughts. Might work
> better like this:
> *Did I break something?*
> That was a fun read, but I'll be honest: it seems
> somewhat...well...pointless, to have it just abruptly end like that. I do
> get the impression you're probably planning a sequel to this, because it
> just seems to me that there's so much more to be done with this idea. As it
> stands, though, while it was fun to read, it just...didn't go anywhere.
Others have noted this as well. You are correct, there is a lot more that I plan to do with this - I have the outline for the second part (not really a sequel, but a continuation) halfway done.
Thanks for writing.
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