[FFML] H.P. Lovecraft (Lovecraftian??) Floors

[Jared Waddell]

> background
> 
> 
> I went to this Ethiopian place a few weeks ago.
>  The bathrooms (of all things) of this Restaurant really had an effect
> on
> motivating me
>  (I'm guessing the women's washroom was like this as well.)
>  - I do know that they also had the motion sensors.
>    The floors of the bathrooms and the hallway downstairs were painted
> look
> like bricks. At places the bricks were missing and *under* the bricks
> was
> water with fish swimming as well. Painted below that was another floor
> with
> chunks broken off and deeper water with deeper sea creatures.
>  This idea came to me the night I was there...although writing an
> asshole is
> more difficult than I thought. It may need some filling out. I dunno.
> 
>  I haven't written a lot lately but want to get back into the swing.
> 
>  Neil
> 

Pretty good. Time to put on a skirt and play Consistency Fairy, however.
Right near the end, where he leaves the table and enters the bathroom for
the last time, his arrogance seems to be slipping. It would be slightly
more ironic if his last thoughts before entering the room were more about
his conquest. That way he goes from being hunter to hunted in the space
of a few sentences.

There's your two cents of advice and a nickel of worthless rambling.

Later,
Rick "Who doesn't drink the kool aid." Spiff


       
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