[FFML] [fanfic][Sailormoon] Moonshadow, chapter five (draft)

[Jon Rosebaugh]

On Aug 23, 2007, at 6:24 PM, The Eternal Lost Lurker wrote:

> And now, the draft of chapter five.
>
> MASSIVE exposition chapter here, folks. You have been warned.

You were right about that. I suggest you carefully consider the  
format of your exposition. We probably don't need to know more than  
just the highlights, at least not yet.

Alternatively, make it a dialogue between Luna and Ami. I doubt Ami  
would just sit still through something like that. She'd have  
questions, and she'd know it helps the learning process to ask them  
and engage with the material.