[FFML] [fanfic][Harry Potter][spoilerish] New Student (draft)

[Robert Atendido]

Thanks for your comments!

>Blah, blah, blah.  You're falling into what I call the "Sandborn Effect":
>starting your fic with a bunch of expository stuff.  Nothing turns off
>readers like huge blocks of uninteresting text to begin a story.  (Mind you,
>Greg got a lot better at this and in fact went back to correct this in some
>of his earlier fics.)

Yeah, I'm afraid I do this a lot.  For some reason, I get into the frame of mind that says the person reading my story might not have all the background information at hand.  It's like I forget the target audience of fanfic...

Actually, I used to write out the obvious in papers for college classes as well.  A couple of English profs cured me of that for a while.

>Heh.  Well, an interesting premise.  But nothing more; we have no idea which
>direction you're taking this.

To be honest, neither do I!

I do plan on writing more of this, but first I've got to do some outlining.  The last big fic I started got away from my original plan, and thus has been stuck in limbo for quite a while.

>Anyway, like I said, lots of potential, but you haven't scratched the
>surface, just set the stage.  I'm very interested to see where you take
>this; please do continue.  I'm looking forward to more.
>
>-Richard

Thanks again!
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