[FFML] [Ranma][Thy Outward Part] Faces

[James Kahle]

IS it just me or has the actual fic have yet to hit the list?

Jimu RetroGuru, the Player To Be Named Later.

>From: skychan <skywize at gmail.com>
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>Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma][Thy Outward Part] Faces
>Date: Thu, 9 Aug 2007 12:24:14 -0600
>
>You forgot to run it through a spell checker and there are a few grammar
>errors as well but its a very good story.  I was wondering for a moment if
>you were going to have poor Yoko fall for Ranma at the end drawing it
>outwhile she tried to find a new place.  And while I do like the current
>ending you could write a great Omake about her snagging Ranma rather than
>Keitaro after his curse is fully cured.
>
>As for writing notes I have to agree with Jorge Pratt, she was just a 
>little
>TOO poilite and perfect even for attempting to act that way once meeting
>Ranma for training.  Its okay for her to be that way but I would expect to
>see some more internal grumbling than we do.  As for later I also missed 
>the
>drop off of her internal monologues and agree that a little bit more could
>be bennificial, even if they are only highlighting her concerns, both for
>Ranma, and at the same time her concerns for catching her husband.  I don't
>think its unreasonable for her to be thinking both at once.
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