[FFML] [Fanfic][Naruto] Suiren, Chapter 12: Days...

[William Little]

Eimii wrote:


I keep meaning to write a detailed C&C of this, and time keeps slipping 
away.

So, before its been too long, I just want to give some quick comments.

The new scene was awesome. As you've been reposting the reworked 
chapters, this has been my favorite so far. The other reviewer was 
right, it even retroactively made the last chapter (which was a bit more 
than pretty decent in it's own right) even better.

I've noticed this, actually. You do really, really well at conversation. 
  Most fanfic authors can't manage to have two characters just sit down 
and chat and make it utterly engrossing. The more your characters are 
talking, the more awesome the scene is.

William